July 6, 2001, 02:11
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Comment on "The Waves of Chiron"
Comments and tips would be greatly appreciated!
Thanks,
K
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July 6, 2001, 12:31
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Arrrg and ahoy mate! 'tis excellent work so far, but then, I *really* dig the Pirates! I think they're an awesome faction to feature in a story!
::as he cracks the whip:: now you...back to writing! I wanna see what happens....will the Pirates find a way to beat the nasty ol' bugs, or will they get a personal introduction to Davy Jones' locker?
-=Vel=-
(anxiously waiting!)
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July 6, 2001, 12:45
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I just have one suggestion. Keep the editions coming. I'm glad to see new stories popping up and this one seems to have great potential. Keep up the good work. 
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July 6, 2001, 19:54
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Thanks for the support everyone! I should have another section or 2 up later tonight.
K
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"Beauty is not in the face...Beauty is a light in the heart." - Kahlil Gibran
"The greatest happiness of life is the conviction that we are loved; loved for ourselves, or rather, loved in spite of ourselves" - Victor Hugo
"It is noble to be good; it is still nobler to teach others to be good -- and less trouble." - Mark Twain
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July 7, 2001, 01:02
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Prince
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Good stuff, Keep it Coming!
I really like the story so far. Lots of action. Are you planning to expand at all to take in any other factions in the conflict? Please, keep it up, it's a great read.
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July 7, 2001, 22:49
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Alright, I put up a couple more sections. Tell me what you think.
Argonaut: I do hope to expand the story to other factions eventually. I'm not sure when though.
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"Beauty is not in the face...Beauty is a light in the heart." - Kahlil Gibran
"The greatest happiness of life is the conviction that we are loved; loved for ourselves, or rather, loved in spite of ourselves" - Victor Hugo
"It is noble to be good; it is still nobler to teach others to be good -- and less trouble." - Mark Twain
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July 9, 2001, 09:16
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Great story first story concerning mainly the Pirates i've seen so far
I like Pirates too, especially since i am playing them in Chiron Chronicles.
-LordLMP
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July 11, 2001, 02:08
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Sorry all, I sorta took a break the last couple of days. Posted what I could get done today. Thanks for reading!
K
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"Beauty is not in the face...Beauty is a light in the heart." - Kahlil Gibran
"The greatest happiness of life is the conviction that we are loved; loved for ourselves, or rather, loved in spite of ourselves" - Victor Hugo
"It is noble to be good; it is still nobler to teach others to be good -- and less trouble." - Mark Twain
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July 19, 2001, 00:41
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Hey all, I'm back. After several days of a broken internet connection and preparing for an upcoming backpacking trip I finally got around to continuing the story. This part fills in some historical gaps. Comments are appreciated. Enjoy!!
K
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"Beauty is not in the face...Beauty is a light in the heart." - Kahlil Gibran
"The greatest happiness of life is the conviction that we are loved; loved for ourselves, or rather, loved in spite of ourselves" - Victor Hugo
"It is noble to be good; it is still nobler to teach others to be good -- and less trouble." - Mark Twain
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July 21, 2001, 00:45
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Settler
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I'm currently writing the Pirates in 'Tides' and let me just say you have raised the bar for all of us
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July 27, 2001, 01:23
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Warlord
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Thanks Sealurk. That's quite a compliment. I'm truly grateful. I'm leaving for a backpacking trip on Saturday, so I probably won't write for a few days. I may or may not be able to finish my next post before then. I guess we'll just have to see.
K
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"Beauty is not in the face...Beauty is a light in the heart." - Kahlil Gibran
"The greatest happiness of life is the conviction that we are loved; loved for ourselves, or rather, loved in spite of ourselves" - Victor Hugo
"It is noble to be good; it is still nobler to teach others to be good -- and less trouble." - Mark Twain
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