December 17, 2001, 17:36
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King
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Local Date: October 31, 2010
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-hey pierre!-
-hey pierre!-
-yah, jacque?-
-wasthat?-
A large vehicle was coming toward them.
-im not sure...-
Twenty feet from the French trenches a steel covered device made its way forward.
An unmistakable red and orange Roman flag appeared.
A large barrel lowered at the French trench.
-good lord…-
The two soldiers fired but there was a loud sound that muted the ricochets.
Both were thrown into the air.
As Pierre came down, he looked at his friend, numbly realizing Jacque was dead.
A faster, rat-a-tat, left darkness.
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December 17, 2001, 17:39
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King
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I rewrote that story too many times. Originally, it was supposed to be a few lines, but I couldn’t fit all the words into it. At one point it was twice as long, with much more coming, but it was supposed to be short and sweet, so I reluctantly held down the –Backspace- button. When it looked something like it does now, I pressed –Submit Reply-. But no, my internet messed up. So I copied it onto Word and set to editing. Today, a full day later, I copied and pasted back onto Apolyton. I hope you like the finished product!
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December 18, 2001, 00:13
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Chieftain
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So short yet so sweet.
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December 18, 2001, 07:30
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King
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thanks
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December 18, 2001, 16:22
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Warlord
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I always wondered what those spearmen were thinking when my tanks rolled over them...
-quinalla
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