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Old March 14, 2002, 23:01   #1
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I need suggestions
I am planning on writing another story, though I am bad and I need suggestions so I can do better than my last story, which I know was bad because I posted it more than one month ago and it never got any replies. It is located at http://apolyton.net/forums/showthrea...threadid=41965
I was wondering if someone could post what was wrong with it so I can improve. Thanks
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Old March 14, 2002, 23:09   #2
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more detail on small events, you could probably make 8 more in-depth stories from that one...
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