NEW Storywriter's Union Thread - Page 2

Metaliturtle · June 6, 2002, 17:15

PM me nominations for the SUNES with the following categories, due to the limited voting, you cannot nominate yourself, but you can vote for yourself.

Funniest NESser:
Most Expansionistic NESser
Most Commercial NESser
Most Gipped NESser
Most Diplomatic
Most Empire Growth
Most historically accurate
Most off the wall.

These are all based on the SUNES, Please PM me all nominations Before Thursday, June 13th.

If you wish to add a category, PM me and I'll update it if you have a good reason.

High Lord J · June 8, 2002, 18:06

I would like to apply for membership to the storywriters union I wrote Power Gained & Power Lost also known as Book 1 of the Dagger of Justice Series.

SKILORD · June 8, 2002, 18:28

When does the voting start?

Metaliturtle · June 8, 2002, 22:22

when I get at least 2 noms for each category

Metaliturtle · June 8, 2002, 22:22

OOOH almost forgot, welcome our newest member High Lord J!!

Captain · June 8, 2002, 23:22

I thought this union was for helping each other write better stories by constructive criticism and feedback?

sign me up if so. tell me about my stuff in SNESA 2.

Metaliturtle · June 9, 2002, 03:40

NESes don't count i'm afraid, the main qualification is an independent story, if you wrote a regular story once, send me the link and you're in, otherwise write a story, i'll look for it.

SKILORD · June 9, 2002, 03:49

If you write that story as well as you did in the NES tho you'll have no problem

SKILORD · June 9, 2002, 08:05

http://apolyton.net/forums/showthrea...threadid=52437

critique it please

High Lord J · June 9, 2002, 12:36

Skilord,

You might want to write the story on word or anything like it and then spell check it. You have a lot of misspelled and not capitalized words. I use AOL Notepad thing for all my posts then spell check them.

Don't break up the paragraphs with broken lines. It looks very unprofessional. If you can't make it obvious when you switch characters through the writing just put a * next to the paragraph for a new character.

Other then that it is really standard beginning. You might want to make something more interesting to start out the story. I recognize you tried to make it not look like you were just stating facts in the start you kind of were. Although you should do that in the story the way you did with people thinking so readers get an idea of what is going on it shouldn't be the first paragraph of the story.

I hope none of this is insulting I am just trying to help out. Let me know if this is to negative, or arrogant. Good luck on your next piece and let me know if want anymore help on your story. I haven't seen many ancient age Japanese stories on the board and this one may be interesting.

Metaliturtle · June 9, 2002, 12:39

High lord, just a small note, it's better for the author if you post critiques on the story because it bumps up the thread, just keep that in mind for next time, it's no big.

High Lord J · June 9, 2002, 12:42

Will do thanks for the suggestion

Metaliturtle · June 9, 2002, 12:47

no prob bob

SKILORD · June 9, 2002, 13:10

thanx anyway.

GeneralTacticus · June 10, 2002, 04:52

http://64.246.32.51/~admin1/forums/s...threadid=52518

I just started on this story, can you please critique it. Thanks in advance.

GeneralTacticus · June 12, 2002, 20:49

I's like to apply for membership for having written 'Our Secret War'.

Metaliturtle · June 12, 2002, 23:49

Welcome another great writer, GeneralTacticus, to the Union!!

trickey · June 13, 2002, 16:15

hey can i join, i know i only wrote small, crap worth story, but im working on another.

Metaliturtle · June 13, 2002, 16:37

Cool, 16 members, let's welcome trickey!!!

WTE_OzWolf · June 13, 2002, 23:26

For those that are interested, the newest installment to The Cost of War is in.

This installment has a little less action but actually ties in some of the references in the earlier parts and has some of the characters finally intersecting.

The Cost of War

trickey · June 14, 2002, 21:03

hey would you guys mind reviewing my new story please. Its called 2nd attmep at a sory.

SKILORD · June 24, 2002, 10:57

Hey! I need a new Reveiw of Cult Of the Rising Sun, Chapter 2. Less spelling mistakes this time.

Is the Union out of the NES buisiness?

Metaliturtle · June 24, 2002, 15:35

I'll be Moderating the next SUNES, unfortunately for all NES fans, I cannot do that while in Philly, I get back to WI on the 30th, so you can expect the NES about the same time as July starts.

Grundel · June 25, 2002, 12:45

Hello guys...

Not to sound ignorant, but I am unclear as to the purpose of this, and what being a member means. Would you gentlemen be so kind to enlighten me?

Thanks.

Metaliturtle · June 25, 2002, 15:48

Basically, membership means that you have written a story on apolyton, and asked to become a member. Members basically stand up for each other when being harassed by non-members, and we critique or at least read each other's stories in the hopes that our own writing will improve. Grundel, you do have an open slot if you wish to join.

Grundel · June 26, 2002, 14:14

thanks for the response.

I have read several posts in this thread in which people have asked to have their stories critiqued. However I see few critques. Are these attatched to the stories that were posted here, or do you do them using private messaging or email?

Thanks again for humoring me. :-D

GeneralTacticus · June 26, 2002, 18:29

The critiques are posted in the story thread.

DarkCloud · June 27, 2002, 18:44

Quote:

The critiques are posted in the story thread.

...Efficient system

Iits seems to work well

Good idea metaliturtle

Metaliturtle · June 27, 2002, 18:50

thanks Dark

SKILORD · July 1, 2002, 22:38

Here is My NES Map. A custom make from a map of das's which originally had all natiuons outlined. here all are blank but europe. N. America is easy enough for you to do, making a map requires no art skill. in the early days of NES this map was a coveted prize faked by many*. Now i behold it for all at the request of Metaliturtle.

*- Well not really but it sounds likje a kewl story.