A love song...

Al B. Sure! · January 4, 2003, 01:01

Something I wrote...

I know it's late, boo, but I knew I aint wake U,
U know I'll wait 4 U, take pain 4 U,
Stand in the rain 4 U, I'm a man who's staying true,
Now I'm cold & wet, huddling in a warmer fleece,
Old heads think I'm thugging on the corners & streets,
I'm born 2 speak my words, in the night or day, all clear,
I'll wipe away your tears, stay near & fight your fears,
But I respect your strength & how U don't flinch,
I was set 2 be your prince, so charming,
But I was brining more harm in, fighting 4 a queen,
Last night I had a dream of U, me, & that ocean breeze,
My heartbeat increased like I was approaching police,
Now I'm in a dark street, spending time hoping 4 peace,
Please keep your mind open 2 me, even if I aint of worth,
And I'm a give U the love U deserve,
If U please can forgive a thug who hurts.

I aint the man of your dreams, but I'll plan this scheme,
That'll let me stand w/ a queen, be a man w/ esteem,
In a land of dimes, U a queen, 4 your hand in mine, I fiend,
In the dark seeing an angel, who'll end my heart being painful,
I want a unity of minds, tell U U pretty in rhymes,
Without corny simple lines, love your warm dimple lines,
So I be trying 2 make U smile w/ sweet words,
Even if it take a while cause I can barely speak words,
So I write at night, the street heard my serenade,
But I tear the page cause words don't express my need 4 aide,
And my determination 2 win your heart,
I aint about waiting 2 sin in the dark,
Cause I'm above the sin of flesh, I move w/ finesse,
I'll love my sultaness who I'll try 2 impress,
W/ the street arabesque & my sweet caress,
But I'm a be staying stressed til she saying yes.

I be rapping poetry so U know it's me,
Hoping you'll go w/ me & be my Isis, my queen,
A wife is my dream, my life is mean, night is unseen,
Til I see your smile, the light that beams,
So let's hold hands & slow dance under the starlight all slow,
I wonder how far sight go cause I can see heaven,
And an angel helping, I'll be coping w/ hope & bliss,
My wishes used 2 hurt me, my lips is thirsty,
Sharing kisses like hershey, feeling your hips is curvy,
You aint girly, U a lady that gave me bliss,
From the start, U made me wish I'll win your heart,
So in the day or dark, lay your head on my shoulder,
I'll always hold ya, I said I'll be your souljah,
U give me love I never had, so when the weather's bad,
You my star who gave hope 2 my painful heart,
And I couldn't cope without my angel in the dark.

maybe because it's a love song, it won't get trashed like most of my songs get shitted on... what yall think?

thanks

Inverse Icarus · January 4, 2003, 01:02

you rhymed u with u. amazing.

yup. rapper are the only ones writing their own lyrics these days

Al B. Sure! · January 4, 2003, 01:06

UberKrux... i am insulted by someone who refers to himself as the demon warlod of the kruxidians? Say what?

Drake Tungsten · January 4, 2003, 01:08

Guynemer · January 4, 2003, 01:28

Sorry. I can't take any "song" seriously that replaces words with numbers and letters.

Shi Huangdi · January 4, 2003, 01:35

David Floyd · January 4, 2003, 01:38

Yes, the whole bit about replacing words with letters and numbers sorta turned me off to the song, too.

Also the usage of annoying phrases such as "I be", but oh well.

alva · January 4, 2003, 01:38

It's........too much

simplify...

Drake Tungsten · January 4, 2003, 01:42

I didn't read much of it. I was laughing too hard to see after reading the first line...

Quote:

I know it's late, boo, but I knew I aint wake U

David Floyd · January 4, 2003, 01:48

Yeah, what exactly does that sentence mean, anyway? I can't decipher the gibberish

And what's a "boo"?

Al B. Sure! · January 4, 2003, 01:50

an old slang term for someone you like

Drake Tungsten · January 4, 2003, 01:50

Quote:

And what's a "boo"?

Significant other. Don't you listen to Kelly Rowland?

Shi Huangdi · January 4, 2003, 01:52

Quote:

Originally posted by Albert Speer
UberKrux... i am insulted by someone who refers to himself as the demon warlod of the kruxidians? Say what?

Better demon warlord of the kruxidians then a nazi war criminal.

Inverse Icarus · January 4, 2003, 01:55

Quote:

Originally posted by Shi Huangdi

Better demon warlord of the kruxidians then a nazi war criminal.

David Floyd · January 4, 2003, 01:59

Quote:

Don't you listen to Kelly Rowland?

No.

orange · January 4, 2003, 03:03

haha, last night on Late late show

That was great

I'm going to get her to call me boo dammnit!

Oh, um, you say Queen to much, and a lot of it sounds forced. And the numbers and single letter thing is lame.

Sprayber · January 4, 2003, 03:06

Quote:

Originally posted by David Floyd
Yeah, what exactly does that sentence mean, anyway? I can't decipher the gibberish

And what's a "boo"?

I think he means Beau pronouced Bo

Asher · January 4, 2003, 03:12

There's so much to choose from, but this is my favorite part:

Quote:

I want a unity of minds, tell U U pretty in rhymes,
Without corny simple lines, love your warm dimple lines,

David Floyd · January 4, 2003, 03:24

Oh, you wrote it? I thought you copied and pasted it from somewhere.

In that case, it's probably better than I could do, but I still don't like that kind of music

monkspider · January 4, 2003, 03:27

Well done Alb.

Bas · January 4, 2003, 06:58

Not too bad. The Prince spelling is annoying though, and what's the point of the gangster references?

Provost Harrison · January 4, 2003, 07:34

Wot iz rong wid da spellin?

Bereta_Eder · January 4, 2003, 08:38

Better than Blur

Provost Harrison · January 4, 2003, 09:10

Tell that to SD, paiktis

Pekka · January 4, 2003, 10:44

better than my lyrics .. I don't like those number or U's either, but that doesn't mean there's something wrong with the lyrics, just writing. Clear effort can be seen, and it has a decent flow. I think it was pretty good.. keep up the good work!

Az · January 4, 2003, 10:45

I think it's rather cute actually.

Pekka · January 4, 2003, 10:46

though I have to admit, I did crack up after the first line

. But keep working.. you seem to have some abilities in making lyrics IMO.